What you have right now sounds good. The beginning seems a little cliche' at first, but the change is really good. One more change in the whole song would make it a great acoustic ballad. Good work.
Thanks for the review!
Great sound, the lyrics seemed a tad trite, but the solo was a nice touch, and I would call the result a success overall.
If people call it a success, then it is. =)
It wasn't incredible, but just good, and I like it that way, this has great potential, keep it up!
Nice chorus, by the way
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